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Does anyone think this adequately describes Quantum Mechanics? I need this for an essay...Please give your feedback. Thanks!

Quantum mechanics describes the framework for how to understand the workings of the particles acting on the scale of the atom and below. This model describes the wave-particle duality using a probabilistic theory; the wave function. Quantum particles are thought to move from one point to another through waves, and produce the interference pattern when moving through a double slit. But when measured by a detector, these particles appear as discrete matter, just like how light works as can be seen in the Photoelectric Effect.

The wave function formulated by Max Born when squared gives the percent chance that a particle is in a given place in a given time. This implies that there are certain regions in the atom whereby there is a higher probability of finding an electron, or regions where it is simply not possible for a particle to be present. The largest difficulty with the probabilistic nature of quantum mechanics is that it is no longer possible to predict the exact location of the electron, or outcome of an event. This gives rise to the situation that before a measurement is made, it is expected that the electron will be at all possible locations according to the percentage of probability, or the Schrodinger’s cat situation, where the cat is both dead and alive at the same time prior to measurement or detection.